You saw an advertisement for a tennis course in England but you have one or two problems and can’t stay the whole course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter, explain your interest in the course describe your problems find out if a refund is possible

Dear Headmaster of Tennis
Course
, I hope
this
letter finds you in good condition. I found some
advertisement
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in the newspaper about your tennis
course
, and I am writing
this
letter to express my interest in joining your
course
but I have several problems with it. A few weeks ago, I found
this
information and I think
this
course
is suitable for me. I have skills in tennis exercise but I think my skills are not enough to join in some
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competition
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,
therefore
, I will join your
course
to enhance my abilities until I am able to reach my goals to
follow
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some
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competition
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the next time.
On the other hand
, I have some problems
that's make
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me unable to solve my
course
for three
months
. I will move to another city two
months
later because my father has
solved
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his work in
this
city,
therefore
, he must move to the new company. Unfortunately, I must follow him to the new place for his new job. Hopefully, I pardon you for allowing me to follow the
course
for two
months
and pay only for two
months
as well
as
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you be able to refund my registration payment for a month.
Finally
, I hope you understand my situation. Thank you for your attention in advance, and I waiting for your forward too soon. Yours Sincerely Alfian,
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task achievement
Your letter adequately addresses the task but lacks some details and clarity. For instance, specify the start and end date of the course, and mention the exact dates you can attend.
coherence cohesion
The logical flow of information can be improved. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea. For instance, separate your explanation of your interest in the course and your problems into distinct paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Some sentences are grammatically incorrect or awkward. For example, 'I found some advertisement in the newspaper' should be 'I found an advertisement in the newspaper.' Pay attention to your grammar and sentence structure.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are polite and appropriate.
task achievement
You clearly express your interest in improving your tennis skills and your reasons for joining the course.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is formal, which is suitable for the context.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • course director
  • inquire
  • attend
  • commitments
  • refund
  • partial refund
  • alternative solutions
  • improve skills
  • unfortunately
  • unable
  • regret
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