The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The
first
diagram
illustrates the stages in the life
a
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of a
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silkworm,
while
the
second
diagram
shows
production
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the production
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of
silk
cloth.
Overall
, there are four stages in the life cycle of a silkworm from eggs to
cocoon
.
However
,
after
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apply
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this
picture has
last
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the last
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step of
silkworm’s
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the silkworm’s
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transformation —
moth
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the moth
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. In the
diagram
lifecycle
present
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presents
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stages until
cocoon
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the cocoon
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, because
first
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the first
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diagram
connects with
second
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the second
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, where it has
process
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the process
a process
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of production
silk
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of silk
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clothes.
Initially
,
first
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the first
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stage
shows us how eggs are laying on the overside of mulberry leaf and
remaining
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remain
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there for between 10 days.
After
this
, silkworm larvae emerge from the eggs and continue in that form
during
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for
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4-6 weeks. At
this
time larvae
is
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are
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eating its
first
place — mulberry leaf.
At the end
of six weeks, larvae
is turning
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turn
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into
silk
throad
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thread
for 3-8 days. After
third
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the third
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stage
,
silk
throads
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threads
are standing
cocoon
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cocoons
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.
This
step
the
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is the
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last
for
first
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the first
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diagram
. The
second
diagram
shows that the
cocoon
uses
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is used
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for
production
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the production
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of
silk
clothes.
First
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The first
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stage
is a select some cocoons and
after
this
, for
second
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the second
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stage
, it is
putted
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put
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in the water.
Following
this
, cocoons are unwinded for 300-900 thread.
The
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In the
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next phase,
thread
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the thread
a thread
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is twisted and dyed in different colours.
At the end
of the process, twisted threads are weaved and for
last
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the last
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part again are put in
container
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a container
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for dyeing.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "after this, at the end, last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words first, diagram, second, silk, cocoon, stage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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