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The diagram below shows how drinking water is made using solar power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows how drinking water is made using solar power. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The blueprint provides information pertaining to how using solar energy creates
water
Use synonyms
 to drink.
Overall
Linking Words
, the solar power will be
synthesis
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synthesised
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 by equipment. It will be changed to the energy for the process make clean
water
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. First and foremost, the energy from the sunlight has been wasted since the earth was born. Now it is received by
solar
Correct article usage
a solar
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 panel and
go
Correct subject-verb agreement
goes
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 to a converter where it will transform to electricity. Because of that, the pump is put in an underground well
can
Correct pronoun usage
that can
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 produce pressure
bring
Fix the infinitive
to bring
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water
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 a long distance from here to high ground inside the pipe. Moving on to the equipments are located on the ground. A
water
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 tank is used to contain the
water
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 from the pump and a wooden platform is under to put it higher. The
water
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 tank cleans the
water
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 so people can drink.
Then
Linking Words
 people just only twist the tap the safe
water
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 will go to the moveable contain. It is convenient for people to carry
get
Verb problem
apply
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everywhere.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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