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The line graphs shows the value of Australia's trade with China, the USA and Japan from 2002 to 2005 in $AUD billions

The line graphs shows the value of Australia's trade with China, the USA and Japan from 2002 to 2005 in $AUD billions
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The line charts provided information on Australia's importation and exportation value with three nations, namely
China
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, the
USA
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 and
Japan
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 valued in
Australian
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 dollars between 2002 and 2005.
Overall
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, all buying and selling increased over the given period even though business with the nation of
China
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 fluctuated at some point. Starting with importation, in 2002, Australia brought in goods from
China
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 with around $4.3
billion
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AUD
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, importation from the
USA
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 started with just above $1.5
billion
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AUD
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,
however
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 business with
Japan
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 in the same year was below $1
billion
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AUD
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. By 2003,
Australian
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 trade with
China
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 had plummeted, it
however
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 rose significantly and by 2005 it was already at $4.5
billion
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AUD
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.
However
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, the
USA
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 and
Japan
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 had almost the same trend, they both had marginally increased and by 2004 they increased drastically with the
USA
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 reaching $2.3
billion
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AUD
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,
although
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 by 2005 it had slightly dropped
however
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,
Japan
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further
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 increased to about 1.7
billion
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Australian
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 dollars. On the exportation route, Australia exported to
China
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 and the
USA
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 was below $2.5
billion
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AUD
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 in 2002
while
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 that of
Japan
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 was slightly above $1
billion
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AUD
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.
Although
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 the value of goods the
China
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 reached its peak in 2003, by 2004 it had decreased significantly, it
however
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 rose to just below $3
billion
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Australian
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 dollars. The value of goods that were exported to the
USA
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 and
Japan
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 increased year on year and by 2005 it had risen to around $2.8
billion
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AUD
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 and $2.6
billion
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AUD
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 respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, usa, japan, australian, billion, aud with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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