The pie and bar charts below show the percentage of water consumption and use in Australia in2004

The pie and bar charts below show the percentage of water consumption and use in Australia in2004
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In
this
pie chart, the pie chart provides information about the distribution of
water
consumtion
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consumption
in Australia in 2004.ok,So what do we see now?First of all, we can see that the highest proportion of
water
consumption is by
residental
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residential
houses, almost 50
percent
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.Next on the list are residential apartments , businesses , government , industry , and so others.Next on the list are residential apartments, the business sector, government, industry, and so on. In the next table, we see that residential buildings use most of their
water
in the bathroom, which is a natural consequence, followed by gardens.Everyone has their own private garden, so of course, there's a
lot
of watering
of
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the ceilings.In the middle of the list, we can see the
water
used for laundry, and
then
the bathroom and the kitchen.I think it's wrong to plant a
lot
of trees in the house because a
lot
of trees require a
lot
of
water
, and the world is running out of
water
, but the more trees, the more oxygen. Everyone has their own view of the world.
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