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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie charts above compare how
water
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water has
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 been used for different
pruposes
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purposes
 in
north
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North
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America
, south
America
, Europe, Africa,
central
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Central
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America
 and
south east
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Southeast
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Asia
. It is notable that agriculture
account
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accounts
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 for the vast majority of
water
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the water
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 used in
south
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South
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America
, Africa, central
Asia
 and
south
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South
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 east
Adsia
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Asia
,
however
, agricultural used
water
 only takes nearly
one third
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one-third
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 of the total in
north
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North
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America
 and Europe, 39% and 32%. In
north
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North
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America
 and Europe, the percentage of industrial used
water
reach
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reached
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 48% and 53%.
By contrast
, it is merely
one tenth
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one-tenth
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 of the total
usage
 in the other four areas, which are all below 15%. From
which
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this
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 we can tell a significant difference
of
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in
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water
usage
 of agriculture and industry between
six
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the six
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 areas.
Such
dramatic
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a dramatic
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 gap can not be seen in domestic
water
usage
, the highest proportion of domestic
water
usage
 is in
south
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South
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America
, 19% ,
while
 it only takes 7% in central
Asia
 and
south east
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southeast
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Asia
, and the figures are all below 15% in the other countries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia, usage with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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