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The chart and graph below give information about three categories of workers in Australia and the unemployment levels within those groups. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and graph below give information about three categories of workers in Australia and the unemployment levels within those groups. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates 3 different workforce patterns by their birthplace in 2003,
while
 the line graphs provide information about the unemployment rates from 1993 to 2003.
Overall
, it is evident that most of the workers were
borned
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born
burned
 in Australia. Despite seeing decreases in 3 categories, NESC remained the highest data throughout the 10-year period. In regard to workforce by birthplace,
he
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 ratio of workers
borned
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born
 in Australia was nearly
three quarters
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.
Moreover
, the proportions of NESC and ESC represented 14% and 10% in turn. In terms of unemployment percentages, it is notable that there was a significant drop from around 7% in 1993 to approximately 3% by the end of the period.
Furthermore
,
other
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 two categories witnessed the same point of about 2.5% in 1995. After that,
Australian
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 joblessness proportion slightly declined to 2%, meanwhile, that of ESC was 1% in 2003.
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