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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates
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information about the unemployment rates in three different
countries
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UK
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the UK
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,
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Europe
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, and
Japan
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 between 1993 and 2007.
Overall
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, it could be observed that there were downward trends
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 all
countries
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, with the exception of
Japan
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’s
proportion
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. As can be seen from the percentages of
three
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countries
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 in 1993,
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UK
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the UK
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 ranked in the first position with
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percentage
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at
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 11%, which was followed by
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EU
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the EU
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, at 9%,
while
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Japan
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 had the smallest
proportion
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with
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 2%.
However
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, in 2007,
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EU
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the EU
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 had the highest
percentage
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 with 7,7% and
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UK
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the UK
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 had the second highest
proportion
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 with exactly 6%, which was followed by
Japan
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, at 4%. Moving to the trends of all
countries
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, it could be seen that the
percentage
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 of
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UK
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the UK
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 decreased significantly from 11% in 1993 to 5% in 2005,
then
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 it increased to 6% in 2007. The opposite trend with
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UK
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the UK
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were
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EU
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the EU
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 and
Japan
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,
EU
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 had its
proportion
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 increased from 9% in 1993 to above 11% in 1998,
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 that, it went down dramatically from above 11% in 1998 to 7,7% in 2007. Ultimately, the
percentage
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 of
Japan
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 shot from 2% in 1993 to 6% in 2003, but
then
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 it decreased to 4% in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, uk, japan, proportion, percentage, eu with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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