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Task 1: The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates
the
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information about the unemployment rates in three different
countries
 -
UK
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the UK
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,
European
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Europe
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, and
Japan
 between 1993 and 2007.
Overall
, it could be observed that there were downward trends
with
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in
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 all
countries
, with the exception of
Japan
’s
proportion
. As can be seen from the percentages of
three
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the three
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countries
 in 1993,
UK
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the UK
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 ranked in the first position with
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percentage
at
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 11%, which was followed by
EU
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the EU
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, at 9%,
while
Japan
 had the smallest
proportion
with
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 2%.
However
, in 2007,
EU
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the EU
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 had the highest
percentage
 with 7,7% and
UK
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the UK
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 had the second highest
proportion
 with exactly 6%, which was followed by
Japan
, at 4%. Moving to the trends of all
countries
, it could be seen that the
percentage
 of
UK
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the UK
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 decreased significantly from 11% in 1993 to 5% in 2005,
then
 it increased to 6% in 2007. The opposite trend with
UK
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the UK
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were
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EU
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the EU
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 and
Japan
,
EU
 had its
proportion
 increased from 9% in 1993 to above 11% in 1998,
after
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and after
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 that, it went down dramatically from above 11% in 1998 to 7,7% in 2007. Ultimately, the
percentage
 of
Japan
 shot from 2% in 1993 to 6% in 2003, but
then
 it decreased to 4% in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, uk, japan, proportion, percentage, eu with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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