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The line graph provides information about the amount of books that were borrowed in four differen months in 2914 from 4 village libraries, and the pie chart illustrates the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

The line graph provides information about the amount of books that were borrowed in four differen months in 2914 from 4 village libraries, and the pie chart illustrates the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
the given line graph illustrates the number of borrowed volumes in 4 distinct particular rural
libraries
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 during 2014.
overall
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, all of the
libraries
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 saw an increase in book quantity being borrowed with the exception of Ryeslip which experienced a decline throughout the period.
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, even though Sutton Wood sharply fell within the first half of the year 2014, it recovered itself to become the most borrowed-books library in the latter half. looking at the 2 predominant
libraries
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 which saw a remarkable shift during the timeframe. in terms of Ryeslip, its volumes being borrowed commenced at literally 300
pieces
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 in June before steadily dropping to roughly 160
pieces
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 by the following 3 months. As for Sutton Wood,where
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the borrowed books started at exactly 250
pieces
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, it slightly climbed by just over 10
pieces
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 in July.
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,
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 number significantly plummeted to reach a fall at approximately 100
pieces
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 in the next month prior to recovering to around 300
pieces
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at the end
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 of the duration. turning to the remaining
libraries
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 where the number of borrowed volumes began and ended at the same point (50
pieces
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 and 150
pieces
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, respectively). even though there was a little disparity when the West Eaton increased to 150
pieces
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 and Church Mount rose to in the neighbourhood of 120
pieces
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 in August, the West Eaton remained stable at that level during the
last
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 month of the timeframe
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 the other one continued to increase to reach the similar point.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words libraries, pieces with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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