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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The provided charts illustrate the proportions of British pupils at one university in England who were able to speak other
languages
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german
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, french,
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Spanish
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spanish
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and spanish
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,
in addition
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 to English, in 2000 and 2010 It is clearly seen that
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
students
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 who speak
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Spanish
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spanish
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Spanish
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 shows the biggest
proportion
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 in both charts and
students
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 who speak two other
languages
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 and
german
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German
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 illustrate the same
proportion
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 It can be seen that the biggest
proportion
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 in
first
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the first
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 chart is
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the percantage
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percantage
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percentage
 of
students
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 who preferred to speak
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spanish
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Spanish
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, accounted 30% in 2000.
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However
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However,
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 in
2010
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2010,
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 the number of
students
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 who were able to speak
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spanish
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Spanish
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 was 35%. The
percantage
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percentage
 of pupils who were able to speak another language was 15% in 2000 and in 2010 was higher for 5%, accounting
20
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. The number of
students
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 who did not speak any other
languages
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20
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was 20
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% in 2000 and
become
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became
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 less
for
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to
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 10% in the second chart.German and two other
languages
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shows
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show
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 the same
proportion
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 in both charts,
10
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with 10
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%
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, spanish, students, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportions" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • multilingualism
  • globalisation
  • immigration
  • education policy
  • career prospects
  • cultural understanding
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • increased/decreased
  • significant
  • trends
  • shifts
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