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The graphs below show the trends in three boys and girls names which are currently in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the trends in three boys and girls names which are currently in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs illustrate the popularity of three
boys
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' and
girls
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'
names
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 which were most used in the UK from 1925 to 2000.
According to
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 the data, It is evident that the
names
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 of
boys
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 and
girls
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 showed different trends.
However
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, in 2000, the
names
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 for the
boys
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,
Daniel
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, and the
names
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 for
girls
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, Emily and Isabella showed the same level of 11
people
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 per
thousand
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. Notably, Oliver overtook
Daniel
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 as the most popular
name
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 for
boys
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,
while
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 Emily remained the highest of
girls
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name
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. In 1925,
boys
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 named
Daniel
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 accounted for the majority of the population with nearly 4
people
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 per
thousand
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.
This
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name
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also
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 continued to rise significantly, reaching its peak at 12
people
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 per
thousand
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 in 1975 before dropping to 11
people
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 per
thousand
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 in 2000. In the beginning, Oliver and Alexander were the same, starting at 1 person per
thousand
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 in 1925.
However
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, the
boys
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 named Oliver saw a large fluctuation, which rose to 5
people
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 per
thousand
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 in 1950 and
then
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 decreased to the lowest point of none in 1975.
This
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name
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 saw considerable growth until 2000, which peaked at 11.5
people
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 per
thousand
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, hitting
the
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a
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 record high. Alexander represented a tiny proportion between 1925 and 1975 before rising to 10
people
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 per
thousand
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 in 2000 In comparison, the
girls
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'
names
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 experienced a similar trend. The
girls
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 named Emily were the largest proportion, with an increase from nearly 2
people
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 in 1925 to 11
people
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 in 2000, reaching the same level as
Daniel
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 in 2000.
Conversely
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, Isabella and Sophie had shown only zero records by 1975. After that year, the number of both
names
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 skyrocketed to the nearly same level as Emily in 2000, at 11
people
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 and 9
people
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 respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls, names, daniel, people, thousand, name with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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