The graphs below show the trends in three boys and girls names which are currently in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the trends in three boys and girls names which are currently in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphs illustrate three popular name trends for
boys
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and
girls
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in the UK from 1925 to 2000.
Overall
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,
boys
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'
names
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have experienced random trends
while
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girls
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'
names
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are stagnantly going upward. Both
boys
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' and
girls
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'
names
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reached their peak popularity in 2000 except for Daniel which had its maximum popularity in 1975.
Firstly
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, the
boys
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'
names
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, Oliver and Alexander started at the same number which is 1 per
thousand
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while
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Daniel started strong at 4 per
thousand
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. In 1950, they all are in different situations, among them all, Daniel is having a steady increase reaching the highest number which is 12 per
thousand
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in 1975, but it decreased a bit to around 10 per
thousand
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in 2000. Oliver has a fluctuative trend but
finally
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rocketed to 11 per
thousand
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in 2000,
while
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Alexander remained almost the same until 1975
then
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increasing to around 10 per
thousand
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in 2000.
Lastly
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, the
girls
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'
names
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, Sophia, Isabella and Emily have a similar trend with each other. The two of them remained the same until 1975, only Emily is a bit different, its trend going upward from 1 per
thousand
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in 1950 to around 4 per
thousand
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in 1975.
Finally
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, each of those
girls
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'
names
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has its highest number in 2000, Emily and Sophia are 11 per
thousand
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while
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Isabelle is around 10 per
thousand
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally, while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls, names, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "trends" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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