The graphs below show the trends in three boys and girls names which are currently in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs illustrate three popular name trends for
boys
and girls
in the UK from 1925 to 2000.
Overall
, boys
' names
have experienced random trends while
girls
' names
are stagnantly going upward. Both boys
' and girls
' names
reached their peak popularity in 2000 except for Daniel which had its maximum popularity in 1975.
Firstly
, the boys
' names
, Oliver and Alexander started at the same number which is 1 per thousand
while
Daniel started strong at 4 per thousand
. In 1950, they all are in different situations, among them all, Daniel is having a steady increase reaching the highest number which is 12 per thousand
in 1975, but it decreased a bit to around 10 per thousand
in 2000. Oliver has a fluctuative trend but finally
rocketed to 11 per thousand
in 2000, while
Alexander remained almost the same until 1975 then
increasing to around 10 per thousand
in 2000.
Lastly
, the girls
' names
, Sophia, Isabella and Emily have a similar trend with each other. The two of them remained the same until 1975, only Emily is a bit different, its trend going upward from 1 per thousand
in 1950 to around 4 per thousand
in 1975. Finally
, each of those girls
' names
has its highest number in 2000, Emily and Sophia are 11 per thousand
while
Isabelle is around 10 per thousand
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