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The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
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The two pie charts compare information about
students
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 from one of the universities of Great Britain who could speak other different languages in the years 2000 and 2010. In general, what stands out from the figures
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 that the majority of British learners knew
Spanish
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 compared to others and the number of
students
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 who knew
Spanish
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 grew over the given period. In 2000, 30
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per cent
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 of
students
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 could speak
Spanish
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 and after a decade
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 number increased by 5 %.
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, 20% of
students
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 could speak an unspecified other language in 2000, but after ten years the proportion of
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 decreased to 10%. Despite
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 fact, the rates of
students
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 who knew another language and two other languages rose gradually over the decades, from 15% to 20% and from 10% to 15% respectively.
On the other hand
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, the number of French-knowing
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 declined from 15% to 10% over ten years.
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students
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 in England prefer the
Spanish
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 language rather than others.

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