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The pie graph below shows bottled water consumption in various regions as a percent of global consumption and the bar chart shows the growth of bottled water consumption in 2001

The pie graph below shows bottled water consumption in various regions as a percent of global consumption and the bar chart shows the growth of bottled water consumption in 2001
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The provided illustrations depict the information relating to the number of bottles of water consumed in distinctive areas and the tendency of
this
 industry in 1999 and 2001. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
, it can be seen in the pie graph that the highest number occurred in Western Europe
while
 the lowest was true in Asia and the USA.
Furthermore
, there are a lot of similarities in the bar chart. Turning to the pie graph in
further
 detail, the percentages of most of the regions were quite low
varied
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varying
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 from 2 per
cent
 to 15 per
cent
 with some similarities between Asia and the USA,
Middle
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the Middle
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 East and Africa and a slight difference in the remaining regions with the exception of 48 per
cent
 in Western Europe. Moving on to the picture in 2001, it has been provided that there was a swap in the position of the highest and the lowest in which Asia was no longer the smallest but
it
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was Western Europe. Middle East and Africa
as well as
 Latin America and New Zealand, Australia and the USA were same at the number of around a tenth, 12% and over 7 per
cent
 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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