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The graph below shows the change in production (Million Tonnes) of three products in the forest industry in a European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the change in production (Million Tonnes) of three products in the forest industry in a European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the alteration in the number of
production
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 of three different products from
forest
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the forest
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 industry, which are measured in
million
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tonnes
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 in a European country.
In
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From
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 1980 to 1985, all three products had an upward trend in their
production
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 rates.
However
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, after 5 years, both
timber
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 and
pulp
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 had a declining trend.
Timber
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 had reached 9
million
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tonnes
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 of
production
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 before it fell to 6.6
million
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tonnes
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, meanwhile,
pulp
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production
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 had
slighly
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slightly
slight
decrease
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decreased
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 from 5 to 4
million
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tonnes
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 in the same year.
Surprisngly
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Surprisingly
, it was only paper
production
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 which had a dramatic rise from 3
million
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tonnes
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 to 9
million
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tonnes
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 in 1980 to 1995, before ended at 10
million
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tonnes
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 in 2000.
In addition
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,
in
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from
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 1995 to 2000,
timber
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 and pul
experience
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experienced
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 a slight increase in their quota of
production
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.
Timber
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 had a little rise to 7
million
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tonnes
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, and
pulp
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 rose to 6
million
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tonnes
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.
Therefore
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, these figures
had shown
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showed
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 a higher change than their initial
number of
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apply
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production
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 rate in1980.
To conclude
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, even though
pulp
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 and
timber
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 had a fluctuation rate of
production
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, all
the
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apply
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three products
had
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apply
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ended up producing more than the first time they started and tended to increase.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, million, tonnes, timber, pulp with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Production levels
  • Million Tonnes
  • Forest industry
  • Trends
  • Fluctuations
  • Milestones
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Outperformed
  • Underperformed
  • Stable
  • Timeframe
  • Data analysis
  • Implications
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