The graph below show the percentage of math graduates and other graduates who got full time job after graduating from a university in Australia, and also show the average salary of both these types of graduates, from 2004 to 2012

The graph below show the percentage of math graduates and other graduates who got full time job after graduating from a university in Australia, and also show the average salary of both these types of graduates, from 2004 to 2012
The two graphs give information about the proportion of full-time workers who hold a university degree and
also
give data about the average salary of these
graduates
who studied maths and the students who studied other subjects.
Overall
, it can be seen that
math
graduates
had a higher rate of having a full-time job than the other
graduates
, it can
also
be observed that the average salary of both
graduates
enjoyed an upward trend.
Additionally
, the salary of other
graduates
tends to increase more steadily than
math
graduates
.
To begin
with, in 2004
math
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the math
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graduates
percentage started at 80%
while
other
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the other
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graduates
rate was under 70% and both experienced a rise in 2005.
While
other
graduates
increased sharply to nearly 90% and decreased slightly to about 85%. In 2008,
math
graduates
only increased to above 80% and continued to rise at the same rate as other
graduates
then
fell down steadily to about 75%. Other
graduates
also
continued to fall each year and ended up at the same percentage at the start of 2012 Turning to the remaining features,
math
graduates
salaries increased a large amount of money every 2 years but the amount of cash shows a different number
while
other
graduates
also
started at 41,000 dollars in 2004 but increased an amount of 2,000 dollars every 2 years in the mentioned timeline and only doubled the cash once between 2010 and 2012.
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