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14.The table below shows a survey of the proportion of adults in California by age group who enjoyed different types of leisure activities in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

14.The table below shows a survey of the proportion of adults in California by age group who enjoyed different types of leisure activities in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides information regarding the percentage of adults by four
age
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groups
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 in California who enjoyed six different types of leisure
activities
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 in 2011.
Overall
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, social
activities
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 like watching TV and spending time with family/friends were the most enjoyed leisure
activities
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 by all
age
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groups
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.
However
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, for
people
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 over the
age
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 of 31, playing computer games had the lowest proportion of all
activities
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 across the three
age
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groups
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. The least
activities
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 for individual based
such
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 as gardening and playing video games.
According to
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 the figures, watching TV was the most enjoyable activity for all
age
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groups
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 increasing from 76% to 89%.
In contrast
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, spending time with family and friends has decreased as
people
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 aged, going from almost 60% to 33% of those who are over 60 as
people
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 spend more time alone. Other
activities
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,
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 reading declined from 22% for the youngest and 16% for the eldest,
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 the amount of spent gardening increased over the ages start from 7 % to 26%.
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, listening to music and playing computer games were the least interesting for
people
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 over the
age
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 of 46, at about 4% and 2% respectively.
While
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 playing video was more popular among young
people
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 at around 15%.

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