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You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task. The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » You should The percentage of household energy use in Australia: Percentage of household energy use in Australia The percentage of greenhouse gas produced in Australia: Greenhouse gas produced in Australia

You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task. The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » You should The percentage of household energy use in Australia: Percentage of household energy use in Australia The percentage of greenhouse gas produced in Australia: Greenhouse gas produced in Australia
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In the first chart, we can see the percentage of household
energy
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use
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 in an average Australian household. In the second chart, we can see the percentage of
greenhouse
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gasses
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 produced
as a result
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 of the
energy
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use
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 shown in the first chart. We can see that heating and cooling produce the most
greenhouse
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gasses
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while
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 being the third most when it comes to
energy
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 used. The least
amount
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 of
greenhouse
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gasses
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 produced is by
stand by
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energy
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. We can see that other appliances produce the least
amount
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 of
greenhouse
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gasses
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 in relation to
the
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apply
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energy
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use
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. Despite contributing to 24% of
energy
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use
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, the
amount
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 of
greenhouse
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gasses
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 produced by other appliances only
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amount
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 to 16%. Heating and cooling
also
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 contribute the most
greenhouse
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gasses
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 in relation to the
amount
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 of
energy
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 used. Heating and cooling contribute 20% of
energy
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use
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 but produce the most percentage of
greenhouse
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gasses
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 at 38%. That's over 1.5x the
amount
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greenhouse
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gasses
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 for the
amount
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 of
energy
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 used

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, use, greenhouse, gasses, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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