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The graphs below show four categories of citrus fruits and the top three countries to which these were exported (in thousand tonnes) in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show four categories of citrus fruits and the top three countries to which these were exported (in thousand tonnes) in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features make comparisons where relevant.
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The
linegraphs
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line graphs
 show information about the
number
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 of citrus fruits ( lemons, oranges, grapefruits, others) that were exported to three different nations ( measured in
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tones
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tonnes
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) in the year 2012.
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, it can be clearly seen that Mexico
was
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had
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 the highest
number
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in
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of
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 two various fruits (lemons and
other
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others
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)
while
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United
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the United
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states
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States
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was
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had
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 the lowest
number
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 in three different parts (oranges, grapefruits, Others)
at
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in
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 the same period. In
details
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detail
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, Mexican
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exported lemons more than other countries at around 500
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tones
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tonnes
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,
United
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the United
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states
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 was the second rank, at 200
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tones
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tonnes
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 and Argentina was ranked third
approximately
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at approximately
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 100
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tones
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tonnes
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.
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, Mexico was transformed the greatest
number
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 of other fruits. Egypt and
United
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the United
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states
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 were the second and third rank respectively. If we look at the
number
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 of
orangs
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oranges
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 exported,
United
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the United
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state
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States
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 was less than
two
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the two
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 other nations at above 500
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tones
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tonnes
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while
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 South Africa exported 1000
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tones
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tonnes
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 as
primary
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the primary
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 source of
this
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 fruit. Grapefruits had
same
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the same
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 situation,
United
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The United
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state
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States
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 was
last
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 ranked
between
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among
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 countries at 200
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tones
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tonnes
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 but Turkey had the highest amount at 400
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tones
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tonnes
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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