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The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table exhibits the changes in
proportions
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the proportions
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 of females working in senior management in three distinct corporations from 1975 to 2015. 
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it is clear that
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 the number of female senior managers increased significantly over the years,
while
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 the percentage of female senior workers had the smallest growth of all. 
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 the table, Finsbury
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. held the largest proportion, accounting for 16% of the three firms in 1975. Over the following years, there was an upward trend, peaking at 26% in 2015, despite some fluctuations. Both Eldan
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. and Bamforth
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. shared an opposite tendency. Eldan
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. had the lowest proportion, accounting for just 3%.
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, there was a levelling off in 1980, followed by a dramatic jump over the following years, culminating in a peak of 64% in 2015. Interestingly, the number of female senior employees had a minor rise from 1975 to 2000, rocketing to its peak (46%) in 2015.

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