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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The present bar chart compares data about the percentages of expenditures for 5 different types (
Food
, Housing,
Transportation
,
Health
care
, and Clothing) in 4 various countries namely, the US,
Canada
, the UK, and
Japan
 in 2009.
Overall
, Housing was
main
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the main
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 item for Countries' inhabitants especially, Americans;
however
,
Health
care
 was not a really important category , particularly for the British.
According to
 the diagram, the first thing that people spend money for it was Housing;
moreover
, the United States 26 per cent, the United Kingdom,
Japan
, and
Canada
 respectively. The second items were
Food
 and
Transportation
 because in some countries like
Japan
 and
UK
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the UK
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food
 by 23 and 20 per cent were mainly paying, yet in
Canada
 and the US
transportation
were
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was
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 costlier than
food
.
Also
, Canadian
food
 prices were Absolutely the same as English
Transportation
 costs by 15 per cent.
Nevertheless
, Closing and
Health
 had the third level because the range in
Health
care
were
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was
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 altering. US citizens Spend more money
from
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on
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Health
care
 than Clothing, but the trends in
Canada
 and the UK were reversed;
on the other hand
,
Health
care
 and Clothing had the same proportion in
Japan
.
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