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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The present bar chart compares data about the percentages of expenditures for 5 different types (
Food
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, Housing,
Transportation
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,
Health
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care
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, and Clothing) in 4 various countries namely, the US,
Canada
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, the UK, and
Japan
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 in 2009.
Overall
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, Housing was
main
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 item for Countries' inhabitants especially, Americans;
however
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,
Health
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care
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 was not a really important category , particularly for the British.
According to
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 the diagram, the first thing that people spend money for it was Housing;
moreover
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, the United States 26 per cent, the United Kingdom,
Japan
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, and
Canada
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 respectively. The second items were
Food
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 and
Transportation
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 because in some countries like
Japan
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 and
UK
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the UK
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food
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 by 23 and 20 per cent were mainly paying, yet in
Canada
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 and the US
transportation
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were
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was
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 costlier than
food
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.
Also
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, Canadian
food
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 prices were Absolutely the same as English
Transportation
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 costs by 15 per cent.
Nevertheless
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, Closing and
Health
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 had the third level because the range in
Health
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care
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were
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was
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 altering. US citizens Spend more money
from
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on
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Health
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care
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 than Clothing, but the trends in
Canada
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 and the UK were reversed;
on the other hand
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,
Health
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care
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 and Clothing had the same proportion in
Japan
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, transportation, health, care, canada, japan with synonyms.
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