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The bar chart providés key information about 2002 to 2013 display global sales of the to five mobile phone brands. The units are measured in millions. Overall, it is clear from the graph that Samsung sales out perfom all competing companies during the period. In addition, both the Samsung and Nokia have seen steady growth over the years, whereas other startups have seen little change over the period. According to what is shown, the Samsung and Nokia during the period between 2009 and 2013, there was significant different in the sales rate. While in 2011 both companies witnessed a study change in their total sales ratio. Moreover, the graph shows that in 2013, Samsung's phone sales rose to a legendary level.in terms of Apple , LG and ZTE,theye are considered as startups also the bar chart shows that LG has the highest sales in 2009. While ZTE company has not change over the past years and has remined constant. Finally,Apple is considered to have achieved great results over the past years.

The bar chart providés key information about 2002 to 2013 display global sales of the to five mobile phone brands. The units are measured in millions. Overall, it is clear from the graph that Samsung sales out perfom all competing companies during the period. In addition, both the Samsung and Nokia have seen steady growth over the years, whereas other startups have seen little change over the period. According to what is shown, the Samsung and Nokia during the period between 2009 and 2013, there was significant different in the sales rate. While in 2011 both companies witnessed a study change in their total sales ratio. Moreover, the graph shows that in 2013, Samsung's phone sales rose to a legendary level.in terms of Apple , LG and ZTE,theye are considered as startups also the bar chart shows that LG has the highest sales in 2009. While ZTE company has not change over the past years and has remined constant. Finally,Apple is considered to have achieved great results over the past years.
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The bar chart
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provides
 key information
about
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 global
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 five mobile phone brands. The units are measured in millions.
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sales
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 out
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perform
 all competing companies during the period.
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, both the
Samsung
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 and Nokia have seen steady growth over the years,
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 other startups have seen little change over the period.
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 what is shown,
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Samsung
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 and Nokia during the period between 2009 and 2013, there was
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different
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sales
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 rate.
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 in 2011 both companies witnessed a study change in their total
sales
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 ratio.
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, the graph shows that in 2013,
Samsung
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's phone
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 rose to a legendary level.
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 terms of Apple , LG and ZTE,
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as
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startups
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 the bar chart shows that LG has the highest
sales
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 in 2009.
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 ZTE company has not
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 over the past years and has
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remained
 constant.
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,Apple is considered to have achieved great results over the past years.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, samsung with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "display" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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