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the chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accoomodation in england and wales between 1918 and 2011. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accoomodation in england and wales between 1918 and 2011. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustrated bar graph represents data from the Englands and Whales describing the volume of owned households with rented
accomodation
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accommodation
 over a century between 1918 and 2011.
To begin
 with, back in 1918 over 75% of
people
 owned houses which gradually reduced over the period reaching the lowest point in 2001 at only 30% and which grew marginally
with
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ending at over 35% of
people
 owning houses in 2011.
On the other hand
, renting
an
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accomodation
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accommodation
 was at
all time
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 low back in 1918, which rose significantly reaching a peak highest point at
marginally
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 70% of
people
 renting
an
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accomodation
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accommodation
.
However
, near the end of
2011
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this
 volume reduced slightly
at
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 over 65%.
Overall
, over the century it is observed that
people
 stopped owning a house and started renting
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accomodation
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accommodation
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words accomodation, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "marginally" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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