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You and your friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were extremely dissatisfied with the experience. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: Explain the reason for the celebration Give details of your visit to the restaurant Say what you would like the restaurant to do

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Dear
sir
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Sir
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 or
madam
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Madam
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, I am writing
this
 letter to express my
dissatisfiaction
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dissatisfaction
about
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with
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 the bad experience that
me
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I
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 and my friend had in your restaurant. Because my birthday was a
spicial
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special
 day for me, I decided to make a
party
 in your restaurant. But I am unhappy about how the
party
 went. I visited the restaurant
in
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on
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 Monday at 8p.m. We
were celeberating
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celebrated
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 my birthday and I
pay
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paid
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 for
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the party
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party
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party's
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 complete
preparetion
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preparation
,and we
are
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were
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 told that
party
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the party
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 package
includes
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included
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ballons
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balloons
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, cake,candells and music.
However
, I only got the cakes.
In addition
 to that, when I
complain
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 to
the
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apply
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customer service I found no answer to my problem. I am totally shocked because I used to
celeberating
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celebrating
 in your place before
for
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several times.
Thats
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That
 why I had to send
this
 email so please provide help
to
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as soon as possible. I kindly request from you
for
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a refund of the package price if you need any personal information you can reach me by email. I am looking forward to
hear
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hearing
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 from you. Nouf Mut, Best regards,
Submitted by noufxmut on

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spelling grammar
Make sure to proofread your letter for spelling and grammar errors. Words like 'dissatisfiaction' and 'celeberating' should be corrected to 'dissatisfaction' and 'celebrating', respectively.
style
Try to use more varied sentence structures to enhance your letter. For example, combining shorter sentences for better flow.
task achievement
You clearly explained the reason for your celebration and the details of your visit.
greeting closing
Your closing was polite and clear, properly requesting a refund and providing contact information.
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