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The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world between 6 countries which is North America, south America, Europe, Africa, Central Asia, and South East Asia.

The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world between 6 countries which is North America, south America, Europe, Africa, Central Asia, and South East Asia.
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The pie chart shows the
pertcentage
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percentage
 of
water
 used for various works in six regions of the world among 6 nations which are North
America
, South
America
, Europe, Africa, Central
Asia
 and South East
Asia
.
Overall
, except
North
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in North
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America
 and Europe other countries consume most of
water
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the water
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in
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for
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agriculture
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agricultural
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purpose
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purposes
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. To start with, North
America
 and Europe
take
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make
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 use of
water
 in industrial nearly 50%
whereas
, South
America
 has 71% usage in farming.
However
, these 3 countries have less
water
 consumption for
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the dosmetic
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dosmetic
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domestic
 area which is nearly 15%. Other than
this
, south part of
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the united
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united
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United
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nation
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 contain 16%
in
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of
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factories
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factory
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 usage and north part
use
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uses
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 30%
in
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of
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 irrigation.
Moreover
,
africa
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Africa
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, central
asia
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Asia
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 and
south east
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south-east
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asia
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Asia
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 have maximum usage in agriculture and about 7% in regular use.
Furthermore
, industrial sectors
at
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are at
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 least under 12%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrate
  • percentage
  • purposes
  • areas
  • regions
  • agriculture
  • industrial
  • domestic
  • disparities
  • dominance
  • dependency
  • contrast
  • developed
  • analysis
  • living standards
  • population density
  • geographical
  • climatic conditions
  • sustainable
  • challenges
  • managing
  • resources
  • effectively
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