The bar charts shows the details the percentage of two types of television programmes, namely reality and game shows watched by males and females in different age groups in Australia.

The bar charts shows the details the percentage of two types of television programmes, namely reality and game shows watched by males and females in different age groups in Australia.
The provided bar charts illustrate the proportion of two
sort
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sorts
show examples
of various TV
programmes
,which are called
reality
and
game
shows that are watched by
men
and women
in
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of
show examples
all ages in
Australia
. It can be clearly seen that
,
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apply
show examples
the highest number of
reality
shows
Correct subject-verb agreement
show
show examples
watchers
is for women.
However
,the majority of
men
choose to watch
game
programmes
with the age over 45
years
old in
Australia
. Nearly %70 of females tend to watch factual
programmes
on television with ages more than 45
years
old.(Which is the highest quantity of
watchers
over the whole period).whilst,exactly %60 of women choose to watch entertainment
programmes
in
Australia
.
Moreover
,precisely %60 of the young population aged from 25 to 34
years
old are into
watch
Replace the word
watching
show examples
reality
shows,compared to just under %40 of them who prefer to watch
game
shows in
Australia
.(Which is the least number of
game
programmes
watchers
over the period). Just over %60 of
men
prefer to watch
game
shows on TV which includes more than 45
years
old.(Which is the highest level of
game
programmes
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programme
show examples
watchers
for
men
over the year),as
apposed
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opposed
show examples
to
reality
shows with the least quantity of
watchers
at roughly %35 for males.
In addition
,watching
reality
shows for people aged 16 to 24
are
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is
show examples
as popular as watching
game
programmes
at just around
of
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50
%50 in
Australia
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words programmes, reality, game, men, australia, watchers, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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