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The bar charts shows the details the percentage of two types of television programmes, namely reality and game shows watched by males and females in different age groups in Australia.

The bar charts shows the details the percentage of two types of television programmes, namely reality and game shows watched by males and females in different age groups in Australia.
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The provided bar charts illustrate the proportion of two
sort
Change to a plural noun
sorts
show examples
 of various TV
programmes
,which are called
reality
 and
game
 shows that are watched by
men
 and women
in
Change preposition
of
show examples
 all ages in
Australia
. It can be clearly seen that
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
the highest number of
reality
shows
Correct subject-verb agreement
show
show examples
watchers
 is for women.
However
,the majority of
men
 choose to watch
game
programmes
 with the age over 45
years
 old in
Australia
. Nearly %70 of females tend to watch factual
programmes
 on television with ages more than 45
years
 old.(Which is the highest quantity of
watchers
 over the whole period).whilst,exactly %60 of women choose to watch entertainment
programmes
 in
Australia
.
Moreover
,precisely %60 of the young population aged from 25 to 34
years
 old are into
watch
Replace the word
watching
show examples
reality
 shows,compared to just under %40 of them who prefer to watch
game
 shows in
Australia
.(Which is the least number of
game
programmes
watchers
 over the period). Just over %60 of
men
 prefer to watch
game
 shows on TV which includes more than 45
years
 old.(Which is the highest level of
game
programmes
Fix the agreement mistake
programme
show examples
watchers
 for
men
 over the year),as
apposed
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opposed
show examples
 to
reality
 shows with the least quantity of
watchers
 at roughly %35 for males.
In addition
,watching
reality
 shows for people aged 16 to 24
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
show examples
 as popular as watching
game
programmes
 at just around
of
Correct your spelling
50
%50 in
Australia
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words programmes, reality, game, men, australia, watchers, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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