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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The given charts compare the six different types regarding speak foreign languages ability of British Pupils at one university in England over a period of ten years.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that Spanish was spoken the most by British students,
while
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 the figure for German only and two other languages accounted for the least. In 2000, significantly the British junevils stood at exactly 30%
then
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, followed by the individuals who did not have any ability in other
language
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 at one-fifth of the percentages.
In addition
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, 15 % was generated to another
language
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 and French only,
while
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 others shared the percentages at 10%. In 2010, Spanish only was communicated at precisely 35%
besides
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, the figure for
another
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other languages
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language
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 increased by 5% over a decade.
Moreover
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, the rest
language
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 types were generated at 10%
while
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 no other
language
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 and French only had a slight decrease by less than 10%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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