The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportions of the people working in Canada in five big businesses like manufacturing, services, agriculture/fishing, construction and energy from the
year
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1850 to 2020.
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, the service business had the highest
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of workers compared to other businesses. Meanwhile, the manufacturing and agriculture sectors had a significant downfall in percentages
at the end
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period
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the period
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. In the
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1850, the service industry had a
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of 33
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Canadian people working, but
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increased and rose to 81% becoming the most preferred industry by the Canadian citizen in the
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2020.
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the manufacturing sector had the highest
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of employees in the beginning
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with a proportion of 33, there was a marginal decline of 9% in the final
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. The fishing and cultivation business showed 22% of Canadian citizens working in the
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1850. In the final
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, the proportion of people diminished rapidly hitting a percent of 1.
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, construction workers demonstrated an upward trend from 5% to 8% in the final
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. The Energy sector had the same
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of employees working as the cultivation industry in the
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2020
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, it stood at 3% in the starting
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, percentage, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • workforce composition
  • significant shift
  • increase/decrease in percentage
  • service industries
  • manufacturing
  • construction
  • noteworthy trends
  • tech industry
  • economic evolution
  • technological evolution
  • main features
  • comparisons
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