You recenly received a letter from your bank that should have contain a new credit card. Unfortunately, the card was not in the letter. Write a letter to your bank manager. In your letter: -Explain what has happened. -Suggest the card could be cancelled for security reasons. -Ask when the new credit card can be sent to you.

Dear Mr. Ahmad, I am writing to you about the letter that I received 2 days ago from the bank that must contain
my
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new credit
card
I ordered on June 25th. As you know, I have
requeted
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requested
a new credit
card
due to
the expiration of the previous one.
Then
, I
had
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received a letter from the bank that should the new
card
be inside it. But, for unknown
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reasons
resones
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I did not get the
card
. So
that
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, I suggest that to hold or cancel the
card
regarding to the security issues , and to avoid
loss
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the money that I have in my account.
Also
, to prevent the usage of my personal information.
And
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I would make a new request for a new credit
card
as soon as possible, so when can I get the new
card
? Thank you for considering my situation. I look forward to your response. Best regards, Sarah Almutairi
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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by breaking down the content into clear, single-idea paragraphs. Each paragraph should address one main point. For example, one paragraph can explain the issue with the missing card, another can suggest cancelling for security reasons, and a third can ask about the new card.
task achievement
To achieve a complete response, ensure all points are fully expanded upon. For instance, provide more details on the potential security issues and the importance of cancelling the card immediately.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and polite, creating a formal tone suitable for a letter to a bank manager.
task achievement
The tone is generally suitable for a formal letter, respectful and clear.

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Examples:

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I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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