The bar chart shows the information of the number of volunteers and paid workers in 4 different roles in the sports sector of an Australian town in 2015

The bar chart shows the information of the number of volunteers and paid workers in 4 different roles in the sports sector of an Australian town in 2015
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The chart compares the number of
volunteers
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and paid
workers
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in various roles namely coaching, referees, therapists and other sections in the sports complex of an Australian town in 2015.
Overall
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, the attention of most free
workers
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was located on coaching
while
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the role of referees attracted the
volunteers
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which were the least numbered.
In addition
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, the number of
workers
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whose attention is attracted by money isn't a big difference between all of those sections.
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, working as a referee could not make an interest in both types of
workers
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who were
volunteers
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and paid
workers
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, people whose attraction directed to that field were 30 and 40 respectively. When the count of
volunteers
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for coaching was more than 70, the number of people who work for money, in
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field was only 45. In the therapist sector, the difference between paid and free
workers
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was 2 people and they were counted as 40 and 42.
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,
workers
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in other sections were 58
volunteers
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and 48 paid
workers
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words volunteers, workers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • volunteers
  • paid workers
  • roles
  • sports sector
  • Australian town
  • duties
  • motivations
  • significance
  • contribution
  • professionalism
  • specialization
  • sustainability
  • distribution
  • trends
  • volunteerism
  • community engagement
  • professional development
  • accessibility
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