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The bar charts below show the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts below show the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the supply and demand of
electricity
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 in ten
countries
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 across the globe in 2014.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the Chinese were the leading manufacturers and users of
electricity
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 tools,
while
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 the Americans and Russians followed in the second and third position compared to the remaining seven
countries
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.
According to
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 the data, people in China generated 5.398
billion
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kWh
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, which
were
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 able to fulfil the
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 of their communities by 5.322
billion
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kWh
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 in terms of
electricity
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 usage.
Additionally
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, the productivity level of electronics in the United States and Russia was
also
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 sufficient to provide their societies' demand for electric goods for doing daily activities. Both
countries
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 were able to produce 4.099
billion
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kWh
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 and 1.057
billion
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kWh
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 of
electricity
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 throughout the year, where there were demands of 3.866
billion
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kWh
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 and 1.038
billion
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kWh
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.
On the contrary
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, in other
countries
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,
such
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 as Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, and the Republic of Korea, the number of production and consumption of electrical goods varied, for each under 1000
billion
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kWh
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 in 2014. Similar to the top three
countries
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, the amount of
electricity
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 generation was mainly higher than its consumption. In Germany,
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, their society appeared to consume 582.5
billion
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kWh
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, slightly higher than its production of 526.6
billion
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kWh
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 of
electricity
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, countries, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • top ten countries
  • comparison
  • leading producers/consumers
  • highest producers
  • similarities
  • differences
  • relationship
  • significant gap
  • global scenario
  • balance
  • imbalance
  • overview
  • highlighting
  • identify
  • discuss
  • mention
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