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The bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries during three different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons wherever relevant. Carbon Emissions by Country thousand metric tonnes 1800000 1600000 1400000 1200000 1000000 800000 600000 400000 200000 • 1975 • 1990 # 2005 USA Germany United Kingdom China Canada India

The bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries during three different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons wherever relevant. Carbon Emissions by Country thousand metric tonnes 1800000 1600000 1400000 1200000 1000000 800000 600000 400000 200000 • 1975 • 1990 # 2005 USA Germany United Kingdom China Canada India
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The given chart illustrates the level of
carbon
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 emissions in six various nations
by
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 the years 1975, 1990 and 2005.
Overall
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,
transmission
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the transmission

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 of
carbon
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 in
USA
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the USA

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 and China reached its peak in 2005. Despite
this
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United
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the United

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 Kingdom and Canada remained very less in three years. It is worth noticing that the
carbon
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footprints
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footprint

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 in
USA
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the USA

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 was counted
12
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at 12

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thousand
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 metric
tonnes
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 in 1975, which
inclined
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increased

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 throughout the time period and reached
at
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apply

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16
thousand
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 metric
tonnes
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 in 2005. Interestingly, in China, the count of
carbon
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 ejection was recorded below 40
thousand
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tonnes
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 in 1975,
then
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 rose significantly double in 1990. In 2005, there was a massive resurgence to a high point of more than 14
thousand
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tonnes
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. As
it
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apply

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is shown in the chart, the number of
carbon
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 emissions in Germany was just around 20
thousand
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tonnes
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 which
was
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were

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 followed by another three countries i.e
UK
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the UK

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, Canada and India. 1975 was the only year when the emissions of harmful gases
was
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were

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 comparatively very low in rest five countries than USA .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, thousand, tonnes with synonyms.
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