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The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 line graph illustrates the changes in the
population
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 of
India
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 and
China
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 since 2000 till today.
Additionally
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, it
also
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 includes the predicted growth in
population
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 up to the year 2050. Units are measured in billions.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
people
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 in both countries increased.
China
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 was the country with the most
number
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 of
people
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whereas
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India
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 had the least
number
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 of
people
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.
However
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, it is forecasted that
India
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 will be more populated than
China
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 by 2050. Analysing the graph
further
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,
China
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 had a
population
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 of around 1,250
billion
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 in 2000.
This
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 figure gradually increased by approximately 200
billion
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 to the present day. Interestingly, it is predicted that in 2030, the
population
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 of
India
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 and
China
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 will intersect at around 1450
billion
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.
After
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this
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, it is forecasted that the
population
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 of
China
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 will gradually decline before
finally
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 settling at just under 1400
billion
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 by 2050. With regards to
India
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,
according to
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this
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 graph, it was the second most populated country with precisely 1000
billion
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people
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 in 2000. It is important to note that
this
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number
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 sharply grew over the next twenty-four years to reach around 1400
billion
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. Projections reveal that it will
further
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 climb to intersect the
population
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 of
China
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 at 1450
billion
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 and continue
this
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 upward trend to peak at 1800
billion
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people
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 by 2050.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, india, china, number, people, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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