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The line graph below shows the consumption of 3 different types of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the consumption of 3 different types of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart depicts the consumption of 3 different types of fast food (
hambuger
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hamburger
hamburgers
,
pizza
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,and fish&chips) over 20 year period
by
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in
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 Britain.Units are given as the
numberot
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number of
number
 times each kind was eaten per year.
Overall
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,
hamburgerand
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hamburgers and
 fish&chpis become the most popular foods
by1990
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by 1990
.
while
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pizza
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 which was the most widely eaten at the start,declined precipitously in popularity. With regard to
fish&chips
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fish and chips
.consumption
showed
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rocketed and hit
the
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a
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 peak.Hamburger was
the
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less popular in 1970,in 1985
smiral
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spiral
trand
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trend
whith
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with
which
pizza
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then
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climb
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. On the
contray
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contrary
,
allthough
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although
pizza
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 was the most popular
foods
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food
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 in 1970,its consumption continuously dropped
until1990
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until 1990
. in
the
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1990 at its
the
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lowest point.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fast food
  • Britain
  • decade
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stable
  • significant
  • milestones
  • sharp
  • popularity
  • patterns
  • preferences
  • correlations
  • observations
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