The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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average

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the average

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Australian household

use

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energy

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heating and cooling for 20%. The largest percentage of

greenhouse

gas

emissions

produced

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from heating and cooling (38%).

Energy

use

for water heating

produce

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greenhouse

gas

emissions

similar

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a similar

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percentage.

Energy

use

for refrigeration and

lighthing

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lighting

give

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same

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percentage of

greenhouse

gas

emissions

produced: 7%. The lowest

energy

use

is for cooking and

stand by

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. It

also

produce

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the lowest

greenhouse

gas

emissions

produced.

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gas

emissions

produced by

energy

used for cooking

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higher than

Greenhouse

gas

emissions

produced by

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used for

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

97 words

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