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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Based on the information above,
average
Correct article usage
the average
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 Australian household
use
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uses
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energy
to
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for
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 heating and cooling for 20%. The largest percentage of
greenhouse
gas
emissions
produced
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is produced
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 from heating and cooling (38%).
Energy
use
 for water heating
produce
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produces
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greenhouse
gas
emissions
 in
similar
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a similar
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 percentage.
Energy
use
 for refrigeration and
lighthing
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lighting
give
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gives
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same
Add an article
the same
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 percentage of
greenhouse
gas
emissions
 produced: 7%. The lowest
energy
use
 is for cooking and
stand by
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stand-by
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. It
also
produce
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produces
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 the lowest
greenhouse
gas
emissions
 produced.
Greenhouse
gas
emissions
 produced by
energy
 used for cooking
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 higher than
Greenhouse
gas
emissions
 produced by
energy
 used for
stand by
Add a hyphen
stand-by
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.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, energy, greenhouse, gas, emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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