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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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the charts provide information about the
use
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 of
water
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 in six different regions across the globe
overall
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, it is shown that
Europe
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 and
the
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apply
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North
America
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use
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water
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 the most for industrial
porpuses
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purposes
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whereas
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 the five other regions
use
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 the most amount of it in agriculture both
Europe
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 and North
America
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use
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 most of
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the
their
ther
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their
water
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on
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for
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 manufactural usage
however
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, North
America
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 uses
water
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 for agriculture far more than
Europe
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 does because
how
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of how
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 massive it is
whereas
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,
Europe
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use
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water
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 for domestic
porpuses
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purposes
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 more than North
America
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 up to two percent all the five remaining regions
use
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water
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 the most for agriculture with Central Asia being the most and South
America
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 being the least
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however
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, South
America
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use
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water
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 for domestic
uses
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use
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 more than the other 4 by a quite margin followed by Africa next by 9
percent
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per cent
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, water, europe, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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