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Task 1: The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Task 1: The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The given pie charts compare the percentage distribution of
students
 in the university of UK able to speak
in
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foreign languages
not
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 including English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that
,
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 the number of
students
 who were able to speak in additional languages grew substantially in 10 years,
while
 Spanish remained as the most famous extra language for both years.
To begin
, Spanish was the most popular option in 2000,
by
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constituting 30% of
total
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 number. The situation has not changed as the value increased to 35
percent
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 in one decade.
Additionally
, the
quantity
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number
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 of people who spoke in another language rose slightly and by 2010 it was the second
favored
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favoured
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 section.
This
 trend was followed by the number of British trilingual
students
, which made up 15
percent
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 of
total
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 in the 2010 compared to
the
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10% in
the
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2000. The proportion of learners who spoke no additional languages comprised a fifth of
total
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 and was the second major segment in 2000.
However
,
this
 index experienced a dramatic decline
by
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 10
percent
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 in 10 years. In 2000, French and German speakers accounted for 15% and 10% of UK university
students
, respectively.
Nevertheless
, by 2010, these two options made up 10
percent
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 of all
students
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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