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Task 1: The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Task 1: The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The given pie charts compare the percentage distribution of
students
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 in the university of UK able to speak
in
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foreign languages
not
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 including English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
,
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 the number of
students
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 who were able to speak in additional languages grew substantially in 10 years,
while
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 Spanish remained as the most famous extra language for both years.
To begin
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, Spanish was the most popular option in 2000,
by
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constituting 30% of
total
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the total
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 number. The situation has not changed as the value increased to 35
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percent
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 in one decade.
Additionally
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, the
quantity
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number
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 of people who spoke in another language rose slightly and by 2010 it was the second
favored
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 section.
This
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 trend was followed by the number of British trilingual
students
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, which made up 15
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percent
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per cent
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 of
total
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the total
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 in the 2010 compared to
the
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10% in
the
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2000. The proportion of learners who spoke no additional languages comprised a fifth of
total
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 and was the second major segment in 2000.
However
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,
this
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 index experienced a dramatic decline
by
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 10
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percent
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per cent
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 in 10 years. In 2000, French and German speakers accounted for 15% and 10% of UK university
students
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, respectively.
Nevertheless
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, by 2010, these two options made up 10
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percent
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 of all
students
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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