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The line graph shows the projected population growth of China and India. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the projected population growth of China and India. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 line graph
discribes
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describes
rising
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the rising
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 of population in India and China from 2000 to nowadays and
forecast
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forecasts
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to
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for
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 three decades up to 2050.
To
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At
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the
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apply
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first
glance
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glance,
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 we can see that India
have
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apply
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started
this
 period with
smaller
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a smaller
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 population (1.0
billion
), and would
finished
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finish
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 it with
the
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a
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 significant prevalence in
quantity
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the quantity
a quantity
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 of
people
 (1.6
billion
 and 1.4
billions
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billion
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 respectively). India started in 2000 with 1.0
billion
of
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apply
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people
, and their number
have
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has
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increasing
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increased
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 gradually without fluctuation and picks, up to 1.6
billions
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billion
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of
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apply
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people
,
that
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which
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 have been predicted in 2050. For today we have a quantity of
lightly
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slightly
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 more than 1.3
billions
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billion
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. China started
this
 observation period in 2000 with
population
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a population
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 of 1.25
billion
people
. It
growth
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grew
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 slightly, and reached
number
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a number
the number
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 of 1.42
billions
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billion
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 in 2020. It is assumed that
this
 number will increase up to 1.45
billions
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billion
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 around 2030
,
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apply
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 and that it will decline gradually to less than 1.4
billions
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billion
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 in 2050.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • projected population growth
  • line graph
  • milestones
  • projections
  • plateau
  • decline
  • rate of growth
  • peak
  • surpass
  • crossover
  • period
  • trend analysis
  • comparative analysis
  • significantly
  • eventually
  • illustrates
  • specific period
  • trends
  • summarizes
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