One of your colleagues is leaving for a new job, and your manager has asked you to arrange a farewell party for him/her. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, suggest a suitable date and time for the party recommend a place discuss the food and entertainment options that should be available Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Manager, I writing

this

letter to inform you that, I have started to work on the farewell party for Mr. Ravi Patel and have selected the venue for the party, food dishes, date and time and guest lists. As 30th June is the

last

for Mr Ravi with our company, I would suggest arranging a party for 28th June at 6:00 P.M. which is Saturday which would be most suitable for everyone as It is the weekend. Because of a long list of our employees and clients, I would recommend the Maharaja Palace Hall which has a capacity of 50 people and is available at a low cost. We will have different people from different cultures, so I would suggest having food dishes both vegetarian and non-vegetarian and

also

having a music system to enjoy a dance or for entertainment. Looking forward to hearing from you. Regards, Ankit

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Ensure that each sentence is complete and check for small grammatical errors. For instance, 'I writing this letter' should be 'I am writing this letter.'

task achievement

You provided a clear suggestion for the date, time, and location of the party, which is important for task completion.

task achievement

Your writing tone is appropriate and respectful, suitable for a letter to a manager.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

149 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

farewell party
suitable date and time
Friday evening
local restaurant
function hall
private dining area
sufficient privacy and space
personalize the decor
variety of dishes
dietary preferences
vegetarian
vegan
gluten-free
speech to honor
light music
live band
interactive games
engaged and enjoys
memorable and enjoyable

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