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One of your colleagues is leaving for a new job, and your manager has asked you to arrange a farewell party for him/her. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, suggest a suitable date and time for the party recommend a place discuss the food and entertainment options that should be available Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Manager, I writing
this
 letter to inform you that, I have started to work on the farewell party for Mr. Ravi Patel and have selected the venue for the party, food dishes, date and time and guest lists. As 30th June is the
last
 for Mr Ravi with our company, I would suggest arranging a party for 28th June at 6:00 P.M. which is Saturday which would be most suitable for everyone as It is the weekend. Because of a long list of our employees and clients, I would recommend the Maharaja Palace Hall which has a capacity of 50 people and is available at a low cost. We will have different people from different cultures, so I would suggest having food dishes both vegetarian and non-vegetarian and
also
 having a music system to enjoy a dance or for entertainment. Looking forward to hearing from you. Regards, Ankit
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coherence cohesion
Work on creating clear and distinct paragraphs for each point you address. This will enhance readability and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each sentence is complete and check for small grammatical errors. For instance, 'I writing this letter' should be 'I am writing this letter.'
task achievement
You provided a clear suggestion for the date, time, and location of the party, which is important for task completion.
task achievement
Your writing tone is appropriate and respectful, suitable for a letter to a manager.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • farewell party
  • suitable date and time
  • Friday evening
  • local restaurant
  • function hall
  • private dining area
  • sufficient privacy and space
  • personalize the decor
  • variety of dishes
  • dietary preferences
  • vegetarian
  • vegan
  • gluten-free
  • speech to honor
  • light music
  • live band
  • interactive games
  • engaged and enjoys
  • memorable and enjoyable
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