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The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the given map
ilustrates
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illustrates
 two potential situated sites for
new
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a new
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 school planned in Canterbury town.
Overall
, it is clear from the data
in
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on
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 the map that both locations
has
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have
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a
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apply
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advantages and would serve
resident
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the resident
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population
 living nearby.
In addition
, both sites were located near
Town
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the Town
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 centre,
also
 there
were
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was
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 no
tarffic
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traffic
 and
arounded
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around
by
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apply
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residental
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residential
 houses.
To begin
 with, the first location which
called
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is called
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 S1 passed by
main
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the main
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 road reaching Sturry
in
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at
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5
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a 5
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km distance, with its estimated
population
around
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of around
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 7,000,
whereas
 the second proposed site
which
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apply
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known as S2
have
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has
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 proved that would serve less
population
by
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apply
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2,500
as well
as
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apply
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far
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a far
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 distance by 2 km passed the main road Chartham. In conclusion, it can be stated that school S1
situated
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is situated
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 in
higher
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a higher
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population
 and
also
nearby
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near
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countryside
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the countryside
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,
University
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the University
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 and
town
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the town
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, where the place can be more
effecient
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efficient
 and
served
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serve
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 different areas.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • residential
  • accessibility
  • proximity
  • town centre
  • site
  • amenities
  • proposed development
  • population distribution
  • environmental impact
  • traffic congestion
  • community needs
  • educational facilities
  • public transport
  • recreational areas
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