The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
The first picture here illustrates the manufacturing procedure of
cement
and the second picture
is showing
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the making of concrete out of the
cement
for
using
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in construction. The raw materials for
cement
is
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are
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limeshone
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limestone
and clay, which
is
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crushed into
powder
through a rolling crusher in the first stage. On the contrasting side, the concrete is made out of four ingredients,
such
as
,
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15%
cement
, 10% water, 25% sand and 50% gravel. Which is mixed in
a
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open-mouth concrete mixer, that rotates to
assure
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a homogenous mix and produce concrete. But for
cement
, a
closed type
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cylindrical mixer is used to mix the fine
powder
made with the crusher.
This
powder
get
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heated in a rotating heater by a burner. The heated mixture is poured onto a conveyor belt in the next step.
Afterward
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, with the help of
conveyor
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a conveyor
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belt, it reaches
to
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the grinder, where it grinds the mixture
in
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into
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fine
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powder
of
cement
.
Finally
, the
cement
is packaged in
the
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a
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cement
bag for the use of the user.
Overall
,
the
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apply
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cement
production goes through five consecutive steps, starting from crushing the raw materials and
ends
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ending
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up as bagged
cement
,
on the other hand
,
this
cement
is used as a raw material, which turns into concrete as the final product.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cement, powder with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • construction
  • cement-making
  • raw materials
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • heating
  • grinding
  • cement powder
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • versatility
  • strength
  • aggregate
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