The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs show the value of imported
goods
imported to New Zealand from two different countries,
Japan
and
Australia
, over a
ten year
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period. There
appears
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to be two different trends displayed on the line graphs. The trend for
Japan
is downward as New Zealand imported
goods
worth 3
billion
NZ$ in 1994 and 2
billion
in 2004.
On the other hand
, figures for
Australia
showed an upward trend as its
goods
were
the
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value
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valued
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of
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at
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4
billion
at the beginning of the period and 7
billion
at the end
.
However
, there is considerable fluctuation for both countries. If we look at
imports
from
Japan
we
could
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see that the line graph displays two large peaks in 1997 and 2000 and that between these years New Zealand imported a higher
ammount
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amount
of
goods
from
Japan
than
Australia
.
Imports
from
Australia
also
fluctuated and dipped twice,
however
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the strong recovery in the second half of the period meant they ended up with
goods
worth four times the value of those from
Japan
.
Overall
, we can see that
imports
were far from stable from both countries but that
imports
from
Japan
decreased over time and those from
Australia
increased.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, japan, australia, billion, imports with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "displayed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • significant changes
  • consistency
  • variations
  • overall growth
  • decline
  • diverge
  • converge
  • spiked
  • economic policies
  • trade agreements
  • global economic events
  • predictive insights
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