The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words
The given bar chart
reveal
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reveals
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the percentage of
citizen
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citizens
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paying out divided into three
group
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groups
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: Food and drink,
Restauntrant
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Restaurant
and Hotel and
Entertaiment
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Entertainment
among the
differrent
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different
age groups in the Uk in 2004.
Overall
, after 60 times most expenditure was food and
drinks
as well as
entertainment
whereas
,
hostel
and
eatery
were on least. Age by age we can easily see the
rose
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rise
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for
foods
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food
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and
drinks
although
,
eatery
Correct article usage
the eatery
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and
hostel
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hostels
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were
Verb problem
have
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fallen except 76. For
under
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those under
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30, the chance of
foods
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food
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and
drinks
and
entertainment
was roughly the same as 6
while
for
eatery
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the eatery
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and
hostel
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hostel,
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it was 14. For
31
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the 31
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to 45 group, English
people
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people's
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expenditure was above tenth on
foods
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food
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and
drinks
and caffs and hospices, but 7 was on
entertainment
. Between 46 to 60 runners, 16 and 14 were for
foods
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food
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and
entertainment
,
eatery
and
hostel
proportion was same as
last
mentioned groups. The peak expenditure proportion was just below a quarter for
entertainment
and
foods
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food
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orders among
above
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the above
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61 periods. still, the lower was only 2 on
eatery
and
hostel
for below 61, and below 75 periods
also
, A fifth had
foods
and caffs . Above 75 groups,
entertainment
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the entertainment
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proportion was double that
eatery
and
hostel
.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words drinks, entertainment, hostel, eatery, foods with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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