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You recently organized a party for your company at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter. -describe the party and how it went - music and lightining -explain why you were pleased with the hotel service.- great food and service -suggest some improvements that the hotel could make - more staff and more varieties

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to let you know that I am very happy with your service provided
on
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at
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the
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apply
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last
weekend
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weekend's
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party
 . It was
great
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a great
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party
 with delightful service. The
party
 was organised to celebrate
success
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the success
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 of the company . As we discussed on the phone about
details
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the details
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 of the
party
such
 as light music in the background and different kinds of cuisine provided to guests . It went
smooth
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 and every guest
enjoy
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 the taste of music
as well as
 dance on the floor. I am pleased with
your
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 wonderful service provided to our VIP guests. Everyone at the
party
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party is
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 satisfied with the arrangements of food ,especially cocktails and live performances. I would like to suggest that if you add more staff next time that it would be easy to manage guests and decorations could be done on time .
Apart from
this
 , everything went wonderful and I hope we will organise more parties at your place. I look forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Roopkamal
kaur
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single idea per paragraph
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logical structure
Ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs to improve the logical structure.
complete response
The letter covers all parts of the task effectively.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is appropriate and polite for a formal letter.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are properly addressed, adding to the formality of the letter.
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