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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line
graph
 shows the amount of
books
 that were borrowed
in
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from
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 four different libraries in 2014,
while
 the pie chart illustrates the percentage of various
of
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apply
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types of
books
 in 4 different months. Generally, as
it
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can be seen in the
graph
 there
were
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was
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considerable
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a considerable
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 upward trend in the number of West Eaton and Church Mount,
whereas
 Ryeslip presented
downward
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a downward
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 tendency, another interesting point was Sutton Wood, which rocketed down,
then
 suddenly increased. Meanwhile, the most popular type of book was fiction and the
least
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last
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 one was self-help
books
 as
it showed
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shown
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 in the pie
graph
.
According to
 the line
graph
,
firstly
, the Sutton Wood increased slightly in July,
then
 dropped dramatically in August from 270 to 100 and after in September it rose significantly to 300.
Secondly
, both West Eaton and Church Mount went up lightly until 150. And
finally
, the Ryeslip area decreased smoothly from 300 to around 170.
Also
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 it can be noticed that the most famous type of
books
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book
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 was fiction showing just under
the
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half, followed by a tiny minority
biographies
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of biographies
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.
In addition
, under the quarter
books
 were noticed in two categories,history and science. And in the
last
 place was occupied by self-help
books
, which showed only a 10%
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