Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opionion.
Some
people
believe that visitors to other countries should follow locals
customs and Change noun form
locals'
local's
behavior
. Change the spelling
behaviour
While
others disagree and think that the host country
should welcome cultural differences . In this
essay
I am going to discuss these both views and give my opinion .
On the one hand , the side which believes that visitors should follow local customs and Add a comma
essay,
behavior
. They think that because it's somehow a type of respect that's given to the hosted Change the spelling
behaviour
country
and worship that . Moreover
, some of them don't feel a sense of belonging to their homeland . For instance
, those who don't feel a sense of belonging to their homeland's
will be more attracted and impressed Change noun form
homeland
to
the local customs and Change preposition
by
behaviors
of the Change the spelling
behaviours
hosted
Replace the word
host
country
.
On the other hand
, there a
group of Add a missing verb
is a
people
that disagree and think that the host country
should welcome cultural differences . The reasons for that believe
are many . Replace the word
belief
Firstly
, most of
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
people
love their homeland and attached
to their traditions and Add a missing verb
are attached
behaviors
. Change the spelling
behaviours
For example
, some of them even when they are visiting different countries they
wear their traditional clothes and Correct pronoun usage
apply
on
their own language. Change preposition
apply
In addition
, if the hosting country
welcomed the cultural differences and respected it
. Correct pronoun usage
them
As a result
, many people
are going to admire the country
which do
that and will respect that Change the verb form
does
country
.
In conclusion, in my opinion, I think that the host country
should welcome cultural diversity because it allows me to give genuine respect to the country
which does that and makes me want to visit that country
again .Submitted by fiesaidi on
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task achievement
While your essay covers both views of the topic, try to enhance the clarity and comprehensiveness of your ideas. Specify more relevant details and examples to strengthen your arguments. For instance, when discussing respect for local customs, you could add examples of customs that visitors should follow and their impact.
coherence cohesion
Work on logical structure by ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by well-structured arguments and examples. For example, in the second paragraph, include a topic sentence that directly addresses the main idea before elaborating. Also, ensure smooth transitions between ideas and paragraphs for better flow.
coherence cohesion
The essay maintains a clear introduction and conclusion, reinforcing the central theme and presenting your opinion effectively.
task achievement
Your essay demonstrates a balanced discussion of both viewpoints, which shows a thorough understanding of the topic.
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