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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart displays the top ten countries for electricity
production
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 and
consumption
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 in 2014, measured in
billion
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 kilowatt-hours. China leads with the highest
production
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 of 5,398
billion
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kWh
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 and
consumption
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 of 5,322
billion
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kWh
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 of electricity. The United States follows, producing 4,099
billion
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kWh
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 and consuming 3,866
billion
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kWh
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.
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 Russia holds the third position in terms of
production
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 with 1,057
billion
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kWh
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 and
consumption
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 of 1,038
billion
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kWh
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. Japan and India occupy the fourth and fifth positions. The former produces 936.2
billion
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kWh
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 and consumes 856.7
billion
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kWh
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,
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 the latter produces 871
billion
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kWh
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 and consumes 698.8
billion
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kWh
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. Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, and the Republic of Korea complete the list. Canada produces 618.9
billion
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kWh
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 and utilizes 499.9
billion
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kWh
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, France produces 561.2
billion
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kWh
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 and consumes 462.9
billion
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kWh
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, and Brazil produces 530.7
billion
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kWh
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 and expends 455.8
billion
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kWh
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. Germany's
production
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 and
consumption
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 are 526.6
billion
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kWh
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 and 582.5
billion
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kWh
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, respectively, and the Republic of Korea produces 485.1
billion
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kWh
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 and takes in 449.5
billion
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kWh
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. The country that has the most
production
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 and
consumption
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 is China. The country that has the least
production
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 and
consumption
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 is the Republic of Korea.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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