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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: explain what you are currently doing describe your suitability for this area of work say when you can attend an interview You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir/Mam, I am writing
this
 letter to apply for a Waiters position which was recently advertised in a local newspaper the previous day. I am Sathish Raghumani,
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I gratated
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gratated
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graduated
grated
 master's degree in culinary arts and have overseas experience of 2+ years working as a Service Captain in a
finie
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fine
 dining
restaurants
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restaurant
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.
Throughtout
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Throughout
 my experience
i
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 have gained lots of communication skills, customer service, food handling skills and order processing. As I always admire
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 for
the
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apply
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luxuxy
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luxury
hotels
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hotel's
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 chains, I am very much
intrested
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interested
to join
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in joining
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 your team. My management studies have
equiped
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equipped
 me with a deep understanding
about
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the
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apply
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industry standards and customer satisfaction. I am
comnfident
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confident
 that my skills and dedication will make a positive contribution to your team. I am available for an interview at your earliest convenience. You can contact me at (xxxxxxxxxx). I am looking forward
for
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 the
oppotunity
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opportunity
 to discuss the
further
 steps. Thank you and Have a nice day! Yours Faithfully Sathish Raghumani
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grammatical accuracy
There are several small grammatical and spelling errors throughout the letter. For a higher score, focus on improving these areas: 'gratated' should be 'graduated,' 'finie' should be 'fine,' 'luxuxy' should be 'luxury,' 'intrested' should be 'interested,' 'equiped' should be 'equipped,' 'comnfident' should be 'confident,' and 'oppotunity' should be 'opportunity.'
task achievement
For a complete response, you could include a brief mention of your availability or any relevant certifications you might hold. This could give the employer a fuller picture of your suitability.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are well done and formal, which is suitable for a job application letter.
coherence
Your letter maintains a logical flow, and each paragraph focuses on a single idea, making it easy to understand your qualifications and intentions.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • currently employed
  • customer service
  • communication skills
  • multitasking
  • hospitality industry
  • reliable
  • adaptable
  • enthusiastic
  • available for an interview
  • start immediately
  • experience
  • flexible schedule
  • team player
  • references
  • skills and abilities
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