The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and  reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following bar chart illustrates the distribution of the Canadian workforce in five different commercial sectors in the years 1850 and 2020.
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, The manufacturing, services and agricultural industries experienced
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the construction and energy departments witnessed the least variation in manpower. In 1850, nearly one-third of employees were employed in both manufacturing and services, and almost a quarter of them in agriculture,
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; only 5% were in construction and only 3% in energy. In 2020, a rapid exodus of workers was experienced; approximately more than three-quarters of staff shifted to the service sector, rising from 33% in 1850 to a staggering 81% in 2020. In 1850, the manufacturing industry, a leading industry, saw its workforce drop nearly by half. Interestingly, workers in the construction sector rose slightly to 8%, compared to a mere 5% in 2020.
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, a tiny fraction of employees remain in agriculture, though at its peak, it hosted around 22% of the total workforce in 1850.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • workforce composition
  • significant shift
  • increase/decrease in percentage
  • service industries
  • manufacturing
  • construction
  • noteworthy trends
  • tech industry
  • economic evolution
  • technological evolution
  • main features
  • comparisons
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