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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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As can be seen, the
amount
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 of electricity that was produced in China was 5398
billion
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kWh
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 in 2014
while
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, In Brazil the
amount
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 of electricity that was produced was roughly 10 times lower than
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china
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China
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 in the same year. The United States stood in second place for production and consumption at 4099
billion
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kWh
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 and 3866
billion
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kWh
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, respectively. Korea, Rep was located in the lowest
of
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rank, Which means
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 country was the least consuming country among ten countries at 449
billion
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kWh
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.
Whereas
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 all the countries the
amount
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 of production of electricity was higher than the
amount
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 of consumption but Germany was vice versa
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it
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 means 526.6
billion
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kWh
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 and 582.5
billion
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kWh
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 were the
amount
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 of production and consumption, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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