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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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As can be seen, the
amount
 of electricity that was produced in China was 5398
billion
kWh
 in 2014
while
, In Brazil the
amount
 of electricity that was produced was roughly 10 times lower than
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 in the same year. The United States stood in second place for production and consumption at 4099
billion
kWh
 and 3866
billion
kWh
, respectively. Korea, Rep was located in the lowest
of
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rank, Which means
this
 country was the least consuming country among ten countries at 449
billion
kWh
.
Whereas
 all the countries the
amount
 of production of electricity was higher than the
amount
 of consumption but Germany was vice versa
that
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it
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 means 526.6
billion
kWh
 and 582.5
billion
kWh
 were the
amount
 of production and consumption, respectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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